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Father Odin and Lady Frigga,
please join me by my fire.
I've made a blessed meal for all,
to deny you two would be dire.

I ask that you accept my gift,
my thanks for all you've done;
so that you'll continue true,
until the Ragnarok does come.

I have only the best to offer,
what I could gather and afford.
But my message, gift, is as strong as others,
just missing fancy napkins and cords.

A poor man's offering,
what he can always spare.
Make another spot at the table,
so its far less bare.

I hope you'll join me
this lonesome night,
as I now share
this simple rite.
I see many people that use a mealtime prayer they find online and that bugs me. And while many give a bit more thanks to other gods, to me its always Odin and his wife. Yet, none of the ones you find online seem personal enough for me. So, why not write my own and share it?

Its not the best thing I've ever written, or a very good prayer to begin with...but its mine damnit.
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somniumsanguinis Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
very impressing! :)
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Lilithmae1231 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think it's very good; it's personal, and that makes it all the more meaningful, the way I see it. And it is good writing, besides. :)
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TheDARKWOLF Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Very thoughtful, offerings have always been what is a real sacrifice (what would be a real loss to you) not about how much you spend to make it look fancy. I think that's a left over from Xtian practices, the more splendor they can make it the closer they feel to their desert god. B-)
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UinenFirestar Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it-- of what you've written and I've seen so far, I think this is one of my favorites. Your sense of rhythm has improved greatly; I especially like how you handled the second stanza.

The imagery is consistent with the theme all the way through, the title fits well but it's not "in your face." And I appreciate you striking out and making something of your own because what you've found in others' work isn't personal enough.

Keep writing!
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Axlazu Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much, this piece was a little trickier that most for me to write; but I was thrilled with the outcome.
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UinenFirestar Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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MabusTheDark Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Quite a beautiful piece, I have not seen any prayers of this sort before.
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Axlazu Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
which is why I was very happy to write my own.
We need more of them around.
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MabusTheDark Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree, this was lovely.
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fknbrsrkr Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
I like it a lot.
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